Wednesday, June 22, 2005
Swimming Pool Tear
When you wrote me that letter
Saying goodbye
A swimming-pool tear
Fell from my eye
It splashed on the floor
It flooded the room
It drowned my dog
Of an afternoon
The salt water stream
Ran out on the street
Like the rush of a stranger
You don’t want to meet
It ran down the drain
With a choke and a sigh
Like the words on the letter
When you said goodbye
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13 comments:
Hi Roger, glad your back! I liked it that this poem had no hope and was rather overwhelming. I'm not a masochist, I just think that a poem should be honest and real when it expresses a feeling! I'll be checking out radio blog soon, sounds fascinating!
and this reads like a song! i like verses that play in my head, and i can pause and rewind when i wish.
That is just so beautiful. i agree with Trans. This would be a great song. Go to it Roger.
Didn't record the gig unfortunatley. But the album is in the making. Only its taking some time. Will shout out as soon as its ready. HUgs
oooh this is soooo goood!!!
really liked this one!!
I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!
i love this poem. we follow the tear and it's so sad. very creative.
Roger, that's a great poem, with a beautiful child-like simplicity but a strong undercurrent of emotion nonetheless. The kind you want to memorize. Kudos!
That is so sad, it makes you just melt! I think I'm going to sink in that swimming pool tear. :(
So well written as A L W A Y S !
Wow that just runs off the page like a tear down your face. Thank you.
Like this tears make the world dissolve. It would make a good song
Love the words going down the drain.
So sad. Great metaphor.
this made me laugh rather than sad :D
Great poem! (Seems like I'm always late in commenting!) I sometimes write poems for the grandkids but mine always seem to sound like greeting card rhymes. Yours are like little stories. I love them.
Cate @ www.litatticlane.blogspot.com
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